![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
I think I'm training my writing/critique group well. Last night was the first time I've taken a scene in that I sort of threw my hands up at and just said, "Tell me what to do with it," because I had rewritten it several times from different POVs and with different tenses and persons, but none of it rang "true."
Just for reference, it's a scene where several of my characters "get" to experience another person's memories as though they were him. And this person is a slightly insane criminal who has done...let's just say "bad things." (Because I don't know what he did, yet. :)
And they told me to make it more creepy. First person, present tense, lots of sensory input, inner monologue.... "Make it jarring!" And this was unanimous. Wow! :)
I may make sci-fi/{dark|urban|epic} fantasy/horror readers out of them, yet.
Helm, set course for jarring. Lt. Sulu, creep factor 11.
Engage!
<cue bizarre mix of Star Trek theme and Twilight Zone theme>
Just for reference, it's a scene where several of my characters "get" to experience another person's memories as though they were him. And this person is a slightly insane criminal who has done...let's just say "bad things." (Because I don't know what he did, yet. :)
And they told me to make it more creepy. First person, present tense, lots of sensory input, inner monologue.... "Make it jarring!" And this was unanimous. Wow! :)
I may make sci-fi/{dark|urban|epic} fantasy/horror readers out of them, yet.
Helm, set course for jarring. Lt. Sulu, creep factor 11.
Engage!
<cue bizarre mix of Star Trek theme and Twilight Zone theme>
